Monday, December 28, 2009

CARDIAC QUEEN

Hi frnz,, this is my first poem in english..that to 5 yearsback,,, i know some mistakes are there still i dnt want to change because its my 1st poem...so more attachment.....
Whenever i Saw
her loveliness, so perfectly she seems
made me a statue....

Whenever i talk
her voice only recall
made me dumb...

Whenever i approch
her brightness clearly shines
made me a blind.....

        but...
 Whenever i remember...
her loveliness,voice,brightness
stands infront of me ,,,
that made me living,talking & seeing person..

u know who is she,,,

she is my CARDIAC QUEEN,,,,,,
           
                                      sathya...........

4 comments:

ashokkodlady said...

Although it was ur first in English it didnt looks like that...its really good....i didn't found any major spelling mistake except one word 'aproch'....i expect more poems from u...Thank u....

sathya...? said...

thank u ashok for ur suggestions and commnts....i wil try to write,,,,,

Pradeep Rao said...

"Cardiac" annodu medical term aaytalva... queen of my heart antha iddidare chennagi irthittu anisutte

sathya...? said...

my queen as well as me both are in medical field..so professional love...any way thanks for suggestion

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